I got some feedback at a mock pitch session with some of my classmates and they wrote down some strengths and weaknesses of my project:

Strengths
-very current technology
-can connect to alot of audiences
-lots of new avenues for realistic immersion, what can we do in real life but not yet in games?

Weaknesses
-has immersion been done to death?
-does it have a story? will it be restricting?
-will need to be well planned
-try not to settle on level design ideas too early

I will now take this feedback into consideration when preparing my pitch presentation.